The Ant Revolution
The more the mob emotion respired
The more broken the act materialized
A fractured evolutionary warfare control
Tasting the divine immortality release of violence
Rising in the bitterness at the scattered enemy
An evil cruelly woven in oppression
Of the free will reality of abominations
The ideas in an ant rebellion
Shifting in the sands of the revivalistic procreative survivalists
The drunken death dream of the drowning virgin
The drone body of the exoskeleton
i have to say i liked it a lot of unusual words, it was nice to read!!!!
Poet for 50 years.
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Pretty good…
My only issues were that its kind of hard to follow…. I read it several times and still am not entirely sure what its about. If it wasn’t for the title I would have no idea at all.
So I would recomend you work on clarity and a centralized point, lesson, purpose, or meaning. And also, although I love the intellectual words, simplifying them would make the poem flow better.
English Major at OSU. never a big poetry guy but I do creative writing so….
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