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Back again…story continued… :)?

So, these past few days I’ve been asking questions about needing critique for my writing. I started to write a story in the moment of boredom, and thought to ask the Yahoo Answers community for opinions to get you all involved in helping me to improve my writing skills. Yet again, I’m back needing more critique… :)

Here it is;

Reluctantly, a few minutes later, I raised my head upright, and pushed myself up. Stumbling to the door, I grasped a hold of the brass doorknob, with a great weakness of dread, lurking its way around my body. As I began to turn the doorknob, adrenaline poured into my blood, and my heart wildly struck within my chest, with an undying thought of someone waiting for me on the other side. I took a violent, heavy breath and closed my eyes, pulling back the heavy wood with the little strength I had. The door swung open, leaving me with a feeling that I was unprotected; that I was in the open without defense. My eyes slowly opened, only to reveal I was alone. I let out a sigh of relief. I’ve always wanted to feel safe in my own home, as like every other child in this world. But I couldn’t. It felt no more than a test of survival of the fittest. Each day that I fought through, I thanked in gratitude. Still, that never stopped the pain anyone felt. I shook my head, as if trying to shake out my thoughts and clear my mind. Gradually taking a few steps forward, still, I was welcomed with a sensation of loneliness; something I hadn’t felt for a while. Something wasn’t right, but I had no evidence to prove it was true. I carried on walking forward until I was stood at the top of the stairs. I warily looked down but only emptiness filled my sight. Tightly grabbing a hold of the banister, I walked sharply down the stairs, my hand followed smoothly against the banister as a precaution. I wasn’t the most balanced person in the world, nor was I the brightest, but one thing I did have was the ambition to do something wrong wherever I went. Accidents never failed to occur whenever I was present.

I do apologize if it’s getting annoying. But improving this means a lot to me :) So I’m grateful to anyone who replies, with opinions/critique. I respect all answers no matter how harsh :)
Thank you!
Lol, thank you both, I appreciate it. Makes me feel happier about my work knowing others like and approve of it :)

Are you storing up for the end of life as you know it?

The dollar is going to become worthless. It’s just a matter of time. Stop for a moment and think what that means. There’s no need to panic. lol I suggest you start buying a few extra cans of food each time you go grocery shopping. It wouldn’t hurt to start accumulating survival gear. Learn some first aid techniques. Imagine what things you would need to have and what knowledge you’d need to have in a disaster situation. Start acquiring those skills and goods.

Is the correct formatting for in-text citation?

Article 38 is pursued every moment in my life. It is never violated in my own eyes unlike some other kids around the globe. I wake up with a perception of security. I do not need my survival skills nor would I need to use them.
I do not need to make a decision about whether to take a position in the army or become a wife to one of the officials unlike the kids who were abducted by the Lord Resistance Army (LRA). Being a child solider does not invariably indicate that they only carry a gun and endanger their lives; it also means they also work as runners who deliver messages and run errands, guards, sex slaves, cooks or spies. There is a motive to child soldiers. They want (the opposing army) to terminate the family and the community relationship by forcing them to attack their families and communities. At some point they are hoping the relationship will be destroyed for ever and will have to build a contemporary relationship within the army. They are given drugs and alcohol, because addictions to these substances make it easier for the leaders to lead them. (CHILDREN AND WAR).
The part that starts a new paragraph is the one that has a source. Do I put the in-text citation at the back or at the end of every sentence. If wrong can someone please tell me how to correct it?

Should we take a moment to step back on climate issue minutia and look at the larger picture?

I found my source to be an interesting read. It takes us off the planet where we tend to argue endlessly about carbon dioxide like its the only variable that can possibly explain our recent climate. One of the more interesting passages I found was this one:

“In a more recent study, Coryn Bailer-Jones [14] considers the following list of possible extraterrestrial climatic influences:

* Asteroid or comet impacts that cause dust and sulfates to cool the globe or even eject the atmosphere.
* Supernova and gamma ray bursts that release large amounts of energy in the form of hard x-rays or cosmic rays, which ionize the atmosphere, destroy the ozone layer and change atmospheric chemistry to absorb visible Solar radiation, thereby cooling the planet.
* Solar system’s encounter with giant molecular clouds that inject cosmic dust into Earth’s atmosphere, lowering Solar irradiation and cooling the planet or concomitantly fueling the Sun, raising its luminosity, and increasing Earth’s precipitation, which triggers an ice age.
* Solar system’s crossing the galactic spiral arms, exposes it to greater cosmic ray flux.
* Solar system’s crossing the galactic plane, which exposing Earth to greater cosmic ray flux.
* Solar system’s radial motion with respect to the galactic center.
* Sun’s varying electromagnetic flux and cosmic ray flux in the solar wind, which mediates galactic cosmic ray flux, controls cloud formation and cools the planet.
* Variations in Earth’s orbit about the Sun.

There are some concepts in there that I haven’t really heard being discussed here. And there are pretty good references at the end of the article.

Do you think this article could give you pause for thought regarding the natural influences on the Earth’s climate?

Note: Link to follow soon….

http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Cosmology-Climate-Connection-How-Extraterrestrial-Forces-Influence-The-Weather

Ozoneguy, I’m a little surprised at part of your answer given your name. First, gamma ray bursts are detectable. One hits every single day and this is being closely monitored. http://heasarc.nasa.gov/docs/swift/swiftsc.html

Second, gamma ray bursts do indeed destroy ozone. Perhaps you think that because it’s an ionizing radiation that it builds ozone molecules. Well it has much higher energy than that and creates another process which destroys ozone: “Gamma rays, a high-energy form of light, can break molecular nitrogen (N2) into nitrogen atoms, which react with molecular oxygen (O2) to form nitric oxide (NO). NO will destroy ozone (O3) and produce nitrogen dioxide (NO2). NO2 will then react with atomic oxygen to reform NO. More NO means more ozone destruction.” http://www.nasa.gov/vision/universe/starsgalaxies/gammaray_extinction.html
I meant gamma ray bursts are present and detectable.

Should we take a moment to step back on climate issue minutia and look at the larger picture?

I found my source to be an interesting read. It takes us off the planet where we tend to argue endlessly about carbon dioxide like its the only variable that can possibly explain our recent climate. One of the more interesting passages I found was this one:

“In a more recent study, Coryn Bailer-Jones [14] considers the following list of possible extraterrestrial climatic influences:

* Asteroid or comet impacts that cause dust and sulfates to cool the globe or even eject the atmosphere.
* Supernova and gamma ray bursts that release large amounts of energy in the form of hard x-rays or cosmic rays, which ionize the atmosphere, destroy the ozone layer and change atmospheric chemistry to absorb visible Solar radiation, thereby cooling the planet.
* Solar system’s encounter with giant molecular clouds that inject cosmic dust into Earth’s atmosphere, lowering Solar irradiation and cooling the planet or concomitantly fueling the Sun, raising its luminosity, and increasing Earth’s precipitation, which triggers an ice age.
* Solar system’s crossing the galactic spiral arms, exposes it to greater cosmic ray flux.
* Solar system’s crossing the galactic plane, which exposing Earth to greater cosmic ray flux.
* Solar system’s radial motion with respect to the galactic center.
* Sun’s varying electromagnetic flux and cosmic ray flux in the solar wind, which mediates galactic cosmic ray flux, controls cloud formation and cools the planet.
* Variations in Earth’s orbit about the Sun.

There are some concepts in there that I haven’t really heard being discussed here. And there are pretty good references at the end of the article.

Do you think this article could give you pause for thought regarding the natural influences on the Earth’s climate?

Note: Link to follow soon….

http://hubpages.com/hub/The-Cosmology-Climate-Connection-How-Extraterrestrial-Forces-Influence-The-Weather

Ozoneguy, I’m a little surprised at part of your answer given your name. First, gamma ray bursts are detectable. One hits every single day and this is being closely monitored. http://heasarc.nasa.gov/docs/swift/swiftsc.html

Second, gamma ray bursts do indeed destroy ozone. Perhaps you think that because it’s an ionizing radiation that it builds ozone molecules. Well it has much higher energy than that and creates another process which destroys ozone: “Gamma rays, a high-energy form of light, can break molecular nitrogen (N2) into nitrogen atoms, which react with molecular oxygen (O2) to form nitric oxide (NO). NO will destroy ozone (O3) and produce nitrogen dioxide (NO2). NO2 will then react with atomic oxygen to reform NO. More NO means more ozone destruction.” http://www.nasa.gov/vision/universe/starsgalaxies/gammaray_extinction.html
I meant gamma ray bursts are present and detectable.